The rough rough draft of my Essay

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Serious question, do you just completely ignore spell check? I'm rereading this and I'm just struggling to understand how you can just ignore a spell-check on your word processor and your browser so many times.
 
Is this for school? If so this might not be the best idea because 1. Alot of people wont know what you are talking about, and 2. Your putting yourself at the risk of being made fun of alot for "playing" with rubiks cubes.
 
Fix spelling errors before posting. Before the days of spell-check, it would be acceptable to have a draft that contains spelling errors. But not even going through those before posting, it's and indication to us that you don't value our time.

"It has 6 independently turning sides, each with there own face color stickers. " This is a sloppy sentence.

"Its simple design, yet extremely complex challenge made it one of the biggest selling puzzle game in history." I think you need an extra comma.

"In 1979, the “Magic cube” was featured " Featured where?

"The puzzle has a rather simple mechanism." Is it?

"It has also been made lighter for safetey reasons. " Really? Were people dying due to cube/head trauma?

"Those who are faster at solving will usually use whats called a “Diy cube”." Capitlize DIY.

"The exact creator of diy cubes is unknown" DIY isn't an invention, it's just a business model where people can do it themselves.

"These cubes cannot be bought in in stores, and must be online. " You sure? Or is this a US-centric statement? Also, the Sudoku cubes were DIY and sold in stores.

"The most notable shop for Diy cubes online is CubeForYou.com" Umm...rubiks.com has DIY. I'm guessing they have more traffic that Cube4you.

"Those who have mastered the puzzle, and strive to get faster are called speedsolvers." Really? I thought they were speedcubers.

"Speedsolving is defined by those who do it as “Anyone who tries to solve the puzzle as fast as they possibly can.”. " Sloppy sentence.

"The community of speedsolvers is incredibly large, and world wide." Incredibly large? It's a few thousand people.

"All official competitions are goverened by the World Cubing Association." Nope.

"The most well known is the one taught by the book “You can do the cube”, called LBL." There are many techniques that are LBL. I'm guessing the method included with the cube itself is more well known.
 
MUCH editing needs to be made. First, I noticed that it is almost repeticious. For example, you use the word "mechanism" way too much. Change some of those to "structure" or something else. Also, you you already stated that the design or mechanism is simple. No need to say it again in the 3rd paragraph. Fix that sentence and make it say something else.

I think you should make this more "meaty". Add some more things or elaborate more on some of the subjects. Some more explanations need to be added too. The other posters explained what those explanations should be. For example, explain and elaborate on algorithims.

And, in my opinion, some parts sounded too casual. The 1st paragragh ended on "just to name a few." That sounds too casual. Obviously, fix that part to make it sound more sophisticated and other parts also.

Too be honest, this whole essay looks and sounds sloppy. It's too jumbled up and doesn't move smoothly. Your teacher or instructor is going to read this and not know what the hell they just read when they finish.
 
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When you have to write a report on something, to have to assume that it's the first time someone has heard of it and knows nothing about it. So don't say things like LBL or DIY. Use their full names.
 
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