Critique please?

[Foox]

Can someone critique this solve?

L2 B' R2 F2 R2 D2 U2 F' R2 D2 F2 D F2 R U2 R2 D F' U


x' // inspection
U' D' B' D2 R B // cross (6)
U2 F' U F // 1st pair (4)
L U' L' // 2nd pair (3)
U2 L' U L U' y L U' L' // 3rd pair (9)
U' F' U' F // 4th pair (4)
U R' U' F' U F R // OLL
U x R' U R' D2 R U' R' D2 R2 x' U
Got a 14.65 with locks (I average 20)

 

[Jorian Meeuse]

Can someone critique this solve?

L2 B' R2 F2 R2 D2 U2 F' R2 D2 F2 D F2 R U2 R2 D F' U


x' // inspection
U' D' B' D2 R B // cross (6)
U2 F' U F // 1st pair (4)
L U' L' // 2nd pair (3)
U2 L' U L U' y L U' L' // 3rd pair (9)
U' F' U' F // 4th pair (4)
U R' U' F' U F R // OLL
U x R' U R' D2 R U' R' D2 R2 x' U
Got a 14.65 with locks (I average 20)

your cross solution is better to be fingertricked with blue top red front, as U'D' R' D2 F R, which would leave the red white pair as U2 L' U L
After you did U' D' B' D2 R B, the orange yellow pair is better, simply do L U2 L'. You can then rotate for the red white pair and do U2 L' U L
2nd pair was obviously good
For the 3rd pair I would have done U' L F' L' F L' U L
For the 4th pair, it's better to just do y' U' R' U' R (The y' U' can be done as a Dw' if you happen to prefer it
OLL and PLL were nice

 

[randomness...]

try to not solve in front slots for f2l
better solution than mine'

 

[caleb_g]

am i stupid? this seems optimal to me ngl

 

[randomness...]

am i stupid? this seems optimal to me

its more of a preference ig